cool, has some great verses in it and i love the images u describe

I like the concept, it is very different and I thought the verses flowed nicely with the descriptions.

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"You must be the change you wish to see in the world,"--Gandhi

Yes, I do agree, I have to put this up since it keeps haunting me >.<

Thank you.

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All my powers of expression
And thoughts so sublime
Could never do you justice
In reason or rhyme

*Writers-Club

I was looking forward to your philosophical comments...but they weren't here

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All my powers of expression
And thoughts so sublime
Could never do you justice
In reason or rhyme

*Writers-Club

"Love is blind
But nature has sight
You're the spider
And I am the fly
You will kill me
It's just a matter of time"

this is just i really like this poem, it is unique and yet most anyone should be able to relate to this. great job.

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Ceade mile failte

Come away! O, human child!
To the woods and waters wild,
With a fairy hand in hand,
For the world's more full of weeping than
you can understand-W.B. Yeats :geekflirt:

Thank you so very much. I truly appreciate your kind words. Also, I really loved your piece...as you can tell from my comment.

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All my powers of expression
And thoughts so sublime
Could never do you justice
In reason or rhyme

*Writers-Club

you're very much welcome ^^ and your words are greatly appreciated as well

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Ceade mile failte

Come away! O, human child!
To the woods and waters wild,
With a fairy hand in hand,
For the world's more full of weeping than
you can understand-W.B. Yeats :geekflirt:

I'm very flattered to hear...more than you know

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All my powers of expression
And thoughts so sublime
Could never do you justice
In reason or rhyme

*Writers-Club

I'm sorry to disappoint...I didn't know I said such philosophical things things all the time. This to me is a poem about love, and I don't think anyone is ever able to truly describe it or combat it with philosophical messages. After reading this again, I see some things I might've missed, I love the concept because of its imagery but I also realized that there is more to just pictures here. It shows that as humans or of any species we are susceptible to anything and that even though we portray ourselves with having barriers surrounding us constantly, those can come down at any given time. And sometimes this fact can destroy us, I think that it is clear that we never really protected all along, and if we try to put up barriers that we thought were there, we find out that we are truly evermore defenseless.

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"You must be the change you wish to see in the world,"--Gandhi

Yes, I do agree, I have to put this up since it keeps haunting me >.<