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Returning Dreams To The Sea by ~Viva-Hate:iconViva-Hate:



If all the world is a stage
What part am I supposed to play?
A fool for love? The naive dreamer?
I'm hopeless either way...

I once wore my heart upon my sleeve
And it was blown away by the breeze
Now I wear a pain that no one sees
It comes and goes but never leaves

Sweet nothings were exactly that
Wasted whispers in my ear
All your truths turn to a lie
When emotions change from year to year

I'm not as cold and cruel as I appear
I only long to feel something sincere
Since my heart strings were cut by my puppeteer
All I've known is doubt and fear

Trusting in the will of God
Has been as good as being blind
Hiding in the shadows, he remains
The best thing I'll never find

When you close your mind and eyes
You miss the ones you should lionize
You're feeding egos and stroking ids
And none of them are mine

I'll cast my dreams into the sea
So they'll wash up on another shore
And be found by someone who needs them more
Someone whose never had a dream before

Take them, they're free...
They never did a thing for me
They never meant a thing to me
They never changed a thing for me

Draining all that is in my sight
Drive a stake through these eyes
They are vampires who have long forgot
How it once felt to feel alive
©2008 ~Viva-Hate
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~werewolf-Moon:iconwerewolf-Moon: Apr 1, 2008, 6:33:47 PM
I love it, very well written like all of your poetry.

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"Some Men Aren't Looking For Anything Logical. They Can't Be Bought, Bullied, Reasoned Or Negotiated With. Some Men Just Want To Watch The World Burn."-Batman The Dark Knight.
~Viva-Hate:iconViva-Hate: Apr 1, 2008, 8:01:47 PM
Thank you so very much! As always I am very appreciative by your unwaivering support of me. It means so much. :)

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All my powers of expression
And thoughts so sublime
Could never do you justice
In reason or rhyme

*Writers-Club
~MistakenPoet:iconMistakenPoet: Apr 2, 2008, 3:32:56 AM
I have little more to say than I like it. Some of the lines have an unusual flow, but for me that's analogous to a time signature change in a piece of music. Nothing wrong with it, if it gets your point across.
~werewolf-Moon:iconwerewolf-Moon: Apr 2, 2008, 3:50:25 AM
Your welcome. :)

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"Some Men Aren't Looking For Anything Logical. They Can't Be Bought, Bullied, Reasoned Or Negotiated With. Some Men Just Want To Watch The World Burn."-Batman The Dark Knight.
~Viva-Hate:iconViva-Hate: Apr 2, 2008, 4:12:41 AM
Thank you very much for the favorite...by the way, does it get my point across? Lol.

I write everything I submit on DA originally on my piano...so that might explain some things. Lol. That is usually why I have a hard time understanding when people complain about the "flow"...because it does flow, you just have to know how to read it properly.

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All my powers of expression
And thoughts so sublime
Could never do you justice
In reason or rhyme

*Writers-Club
~MistakenPoet:iconMistakenPoet: Apr 2, 2008, 5:46:43 AM
This poem means something to me, so I'd say you were successful at getting something across. :)

And you're right, it does flow, if you let it. I try not to confine my poetry to any structure, but sometimes restriction can breed beauty. The Raven by Edgar Allen Poe, for example, or much of Shakespeare's work.
~leonlinnea:iconleonlinnea: Apr 2, 2008, 10:21:28 AM
I love the concept, and I think the voice speaks true of what some people in this world really feel...I find this to be very well done, and its sorrow simply beautiful. This feels to me, a very significant piece of work.

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"You must be the change you wish to see in the world,"--Gandhi

Yes, I do agree, I have to put this up since it keeps haunting me >.<
~Viva-Hate:iconViva-Hate: Apr 3, 2008, 12:22:46 AM
It does seem like it is a universal message...but underneath that, it is about one thing and one thing only...what do you think my true meaning is?

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All my powers of expression
And thoughts so sublime
Could never do you justice
In reason or rhyme

*Writers-Club
~Viva-Hate:iconViva-Hate: Apr 3, 2008, 12:23:59 AM
I try not to confine things to structure either but people seem to constantly think I intended to...Lol. It's quite frustrating.

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All my powers of expression
And thoughts so sublime
Could never do you justice
In reason or rhyme

*Writers-Club
~MistakenPoet:iconMistakenPoet: Apr 3, 2008, 1:31:55 AM
It starts off looking kind of structured, which is what threw me off. My poetry is the same way. It'll appear as if there is a structure to it, but I rarely think about it. I might try to go for a rhyme scheme sometimes, but other than that, I just want to get my feelings and ideas out.